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This drabble...well is the prologue of a fic XD only I modified the Naru's final phrase for the contest ^^ The title does not convince me, but it could not put "pendulum" (the title of the fic) to the drabble because it was not staying -_-
Basically the idea is that Naruto, if he has the opportunity, might manage to deprive to Sasuke of his freedom to bring it of return. Clear that...if I have to make clear that in "Pendulum" Naruto doesn't take it of return to Konoha precisely, so... XDDDD
Link to the version in Spanish in the commentary of down :3
Dedicated to the bastard of my brother-in-law Da-chan (ya te comenzará a gustar el NaruSasu quieras o no *¬*U)
You're mine
The rain was cold. My body already began to become numble.
I was fatigued, sad, aching…In this moment I could feel a thousand and one things passing through for my mind and body; the only thing that I could understand was is that I was not alone there. I was not alone; he was there, my brother…his body at my side.
I wanted to extend my arm to reach him, but it was useless. My organism would not obey me. I knew it perfectly: I was dying.
My eyes saw the turbid image of my own corpse, in a not very distant past, darling nii-san. He was the person in responsible of my suffering but still after receiving realized my revenge…he continued being the cause of my pain.
The revenge; he had forced me, he had made me like that. I had choice, but I might not withstand it ever happing again…I’m a coward…I knew that I could have learnt to trust in someone more, but before: I had to eliminate the shades of my past. To begin a new life, I must eliminate my previous life.
- Naruto.
Your name escaped of my lips in almost mute way. Yes, I had begun thinking about you, I’d been doing it since a while. Your blue-eyes were proving serene; a smile was on your face. A laugh that I before had never seen you make. You seemed to be pleased.
I also smile; I smile and close my eyes refusing to that image; cursing my weak mind. Already I had begun to hallucinate.
“And now…you are mine, teme. You’ll never return to escape of me, dattebayo.”
Aka: and not...Sasuke did not die 6¬6
Basically the idea is that Naruto, if he has the opportunity, might manage to deprive to Sasuke of his freedom to bring it of return. Clear that...if I have to make clear that in "Pendulum" Naruto doesn't take it of return to Konoha precisely, so... XDDDD
Link to the version in Spanish in the commentary of down :3
Dedicated to the bastard of my brother-in-law Da-chan (ya te comenzará a gustar el NaruSasu quieras o no *¬*U)
You're mine
The rain was cold. My body already began to become numble.
I was fatigued, sad, aching…In this moment I could feel a thousand and one things passing through for my mind and body; the only thing that I could understand was is that I was not alone there. I was not alone; he was there, my brother…his body at my side.
I wanted to extend my arm to reach him, but it was useless. My organism would not obey me. I knew it perfectly: I was dying.
My eyes saw the turbid image of my own corpse, in a not very distant past, darling nii-san. He was the person in responsible of my suffering but still after receiving realized my revenge…he continued being the cause of my pain.
The revenge; he had forced me, he had made me like that. I had choice, but I might not withstand it ever happing again…I’m a coward…I knew that I could have learnt to trust in someone more, but before: I had to eliminate the shades of my past. To begin a new life, I must eliminate my previous life.
- Naruto.
Your name escaped of my lips in almost mute way. Yes, I had begun thinking about you, I’d been doing it since a while. Your blue-eyes were proving serene; a smile was on your face. A laugh that I before had never seen you make. You seemed to be pleased.
I also smile; I smile and close my eyes refusing to that image; cursing my weak mind. Already I had begun to hallucinate.
“And now…you are mine, teme. You’ll never return to escape of me, dattebayo.”
Aka: and not...Sasuke did not die 6¬6
For the contest of
VERSIÓN AL ESPAÑOL [link]
Thanks por revisarlo *¬*
omfc, Thanks for checking it <3
Da-chan is a bf of XDDDDU
VERSIÓN AL ESPAÑOL [link]
Thanks por revisarlo *¬*
omfc, Thanks for checking it <3
Da-chan is a bf of XDDDDU
© 2008 - 2024 AkaneMiyano
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Here I am mon amor!
Ok, prepare for my grammar nazism
My body already began to beCOME numbLE.
--
I COULD feel A thousand and one things passing THROUGH my mind and body.
--
the only THING I could UNDERSTAND WAS that I was not alone there.
--
his body AT my side (may be better)
--
I wanted to extend my ARM to reach him, but it WAS useless. My organism WOULD NOT not obey me.
--
My eyes saw the turbid image OF MY OWN corpse, in a not very distant past, darling nii-san. He was the person in RESPONSIBLE of my suffering but still after RECEIVING my revenge…he continueD BEing the CAUSE of my pain.
--
The revenge...he HAD forced me, he HAD made me like that. I had election (WON???), but I might not withstand IT EVER HAPPENING again…I’m a coward…I knew that I could HAVE learnT to trust in someone more, but before; I had to eliminate the shades of my past. To begin a new life, I must eliminate my previous life.
--
Your name escaped of my lips IN almost mute way. Yes, I had BEGUN thinkING ABOUT you, I'D BEEN doing IT SINCE a while. Your blue-eyes were XXproving to beXX (??? remove or replace with different phrase) serene; a smile was On your face. A laugh that I had never seen you MAKE. You seemed to be pleased.
I also smile; I smile and close my eyes refusing that image; cursing my MIND'S weakNESS (or the weakness of my mind, but also 'my weak mind' is OK). Already I had begun to hallucinate.
“And now…you are mine, teme. You’ll never return to escape me, dattebayo.”
Make sure you see the words I removed (everything I added is in CAPITALS)
Nice story *-* it's good!! Just needs work on the translation (tenses, wording, and grammar). The spelling is fine.
Ok, prepare for my grammar nazism
My body already began to beCOME numbLE.
--
I COULD feel A thousand and one things passing THROUGH my mind and body.
--
the only THING I could UNDERSTAND WAS that I was not alone there.
--
his body AT my side (may be better)
--
I wanted to extend my ARM to reach him, but it WAS useless. My organism WOULD NOT not obey me.
--
My eyes saw the turbid image OF MY OWN corpse, in a not very distant past, darling nii-san. He was the person in RESPONSIBLE of my suffering but still after RECEIVING my revenge…he continueD BEing the CAUSE of my pain.
--
The revenge...he HAD forced me, he HAD made me like that. I had election (WON???), but I might not withstand IT EVER HAPPENING again…I’m a coward…I knew that I could HAVE learnT to trust in someone more, but before; I had to eliminate the shades of my past. To begin a new life, I must eliminate my previous life.
--
Your name escaped of my lips IN almost mute way. Yes, I had BEGUN thinkING ABOUT you, I'D BEEN doing IT SINCE a while. Your blue-eyes were XXproving to beXX (??? remove or replace with different phrase) serene; a smile was On your face. A laugh that I had never seen you MAKE. You seemed to be pleased.
I also smile; I smile and close my eyes refusing that image; cursing my MIND'S weakNESS (or the weakness of my mind, but also 'my weak mind' is OK). Already I had begun to hallucinate.
“And now…you are mine, teme. You’ll never return to escape me, dattebayo.”
Make sure you see the words I removed (everything I added is in CAPITALS)
Nice story *-* it's good!! Just needs work on the translation (tenses, wording, and grammar). The spelling is fine.